Excuses...

on Posted by Rajesh J Advani
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After a weekend and a day full of catching up with work, here is another short short.

Hitman

"Twelve," he thought, as he wiped the blade on the body.

They called him a hitman. He called himself a messenger.

"One murder or a dozen, there is only one Hell," he thought to himself as he dragged the body into a bush.

The Devil stood nearby, watching. He smiled.

The End

19 comments:

The Arbit Council said...

why'd he call himself a messenger tho?

Jasmine said...

@ the arbit council: Messenger who delivers death?

Archster said...

I get subtlety on the rarest of occassions. Im glad i did this time round. :)

Aesop Revisted was priceless btw.

Now I feel embarassed about the drivel I just dished out on my blog. Oh well, at least i had fun.

Kiran Mayee said...

Hey this is great. Looks like its time to start some serious writing

Jonathan Steinke said...

Thank you, Rajesh! Very kind of you.

Rajesh J Advani said...

The Arbit Council: As Jasmine said, I was thinking "Messenger of Death" :)

Jasmine: Thanks!

Archster: I'm glad you did too :) And nice to know you liked Aesop Revisited :) It's my favourite too :)
And your stories are good. Really good. I have no idea what drivel you're talking about :)

Kiran Mayee: True :)

Jonathan: My pleasure :)

Nupur said...

here via Megha's blog.

You are really getting good at this 55word story thing!! I can see the progression from teh first to the most recent!! :D

Great blog ur have Btw!

Maru Marauder said...

Interesting.......are you thinking Codename 47? I know I am......

Kumari said...

But how can he ever think there would be just one hell? Esp. since he just created another hell on earth for the near and dear of the dead :)

Eshus me... i do like the story but i am in one of my 'gyaan-spreading' moods :D

Rads said...

Morbid
Dark
Sullen
Pathological

:p

Maru Marauder said...

I tried it myself!
What fun.....
Not close to anything you've written..
but still, check it out when you can...

loverBoy said...

Whoa! Back after a week and I see a whole lot of posts! Needless to say, everythingz nice. This one's chilling, though.

Awaiting eagerly for more of 55s...

loverBoy said...

The Devil stood nearby, watching. He smiled.

Now, this is what I loved the most! There is so much into it...

ph said...

I see you are on a roll here!

Prer said...

Reminds me of a character in one of the dan brown's famous works... :) can imagine the devil and his messenger .

Rohit said...

Good stuff, Rajesh! maybe you would want to look into a genre called "Flash fiction"?

Look-up Raymond Carver and Bob Thurber.

Kiran Mayee said...

I am counting days to see your next post of 55's. Its already 9 days since u last posted :-)

babelfish said...

happy *sigh*
DEATH also watches and smiles
I'm sorry I'm obssesive about Pratchett
but you be brilliant :)

Anonymous said...

what the heck?